Its good but you have changed your first paragraph from ‘I’ to’ He’ and your second paragraph from ‘He’ to ‘I’.maybe improve on checking your work before publishing.
I really like your story but it doesn’t make sense when you said ‘will just go’ i think you meant ‘well just go’ .
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Its good but you have changed your first paragraph from ‘I’ to’ He’ and your second paragraph from ‘He’ to ‘I’.maybe improve on checking your work before publishing.
I really like your story but it doesn’t make sense when you said ‘will just go’ i think you meant ‘well just go’ .