You should check your work at the beginning and check your spaces because some of the words were fused together. But overall it was a good story because of how you put emotions but try to do the show not tell will make the story better. Also i like the way you put a lot of speech to tell what is happening
I like your story but it sounds like a story next time use another word for “skipping”
Well done Rusudan! Yours is great! Maybe next time you can check your spaces and read over your work.
Next time leave a space in between the paragraphs
You should check your work at the beginning and check your spaces because some of the words were fused together. But overall it was a good story because of how you put emotions but try to do the show not tell will make the story better. Also i like the way you put a lot of speech to tell what is happening