Wow Ruby i loved it i could read this all day i loved how it rhymed and wow all the similes ” As soothing ad lip balm” wow
Well i think you could put in more adjectives , and i loved the similes but i Want more and more
Ruby i totally thought you did Amazing
I like the repetition in your poem, it really sets the scene!
Next time, I think you should do a bit more rhyming.
I like the way you described the river without saying the word river.
Wow Ruby i loved it i could read this all day i loved how it rhymed and wow all the similes ” As soothing ad lip balm” wow
Well i think you could put in more adjectives , and i loved the similes but i Want more and more
Ruby i totally thought you did Amazing
I like the repetition in your poem, it really sets the scene!
Next time, I think you should do a bit more rhyming.
I like the way you described the river without saying the word river.
wow your poem was very very good!!I loved that you used similes and adjectives but try not to keep on saying the same words but I loved it!!!!