WOW Jessica! Your poem was amazing! I love the rhymes, they were really creative.
To make it even better you could use more adjectives.
This was so awesome, I am speechless!
Absolutely lovely vocabulary
just maybe next time you could use less rhyming words as it makes it more exiting when it gets to the bit that does rhyme
even if i believe that, you still have a great sense of rhymes.
WOW Jessica! Your poem was amazing! I love the rhymes, they were really creative.
To make it even better you could use more adjectives.
This was so awesome, I am speechless!
I liked how you made it ryime it was verry good
But you could in proov on some more repitition
You have done a very job on you r poem well done
Absolutely lovely vocabulary
just maybe next time you could use less rhyming words as it makes it more exiting when it gets to the bit that does rhyme
even if i believe that, you still have a great sense of rhymes.