This is so good, it also has a scary twist to it. I like the way you have done a cliff hanger at the end. You could work on more sentence starters. Well Done!
I was a bit scared of your story and the sentence were it said I saw a shadow of what looked like I young women with a large hat I didn’t get that but I like it
This is so good, it also has a scary twist to it. I like the way you have done a cliff hanger at the end. You could work on more sentence starters. Well Done!
Good work – you could work on your sentence starter but generally well done
I was a bit scared of your story and the sentence were it said I saw a shadow of what looked like I young women with a large hat I didn’t get that but I like it