Amazing, I love the story I like how you make the reader almost have to guess what the animal is at the end but I think it gets a bit jumpy after ‘Slowly I opened the door’ in future try to make your writing flow more. Apart form that it is great!
Mae
Amazing, I love the story I like how you make the reader almost have to guess what the animal is at the end but I think it gets a bit jumpy after ‘Slowly I opened the door’ in future try to make your writing flow more. Apart form that it is great!
Mae
Great work, you just put less full stop. Well done