This is an amazing poem and you can tell you tried really hard and your describing is fantastic especially when it says ‘Would it ignite like a ruby red fire’
This is a really nice poem Alanis and Sophie i like that youv’e used some powerful words this is the line that i liked .does it flow like a feather or stumble in bad weather.
Amazing imagery in this poem. I loved how you mentioned my name! And how the line “Can it survive in a hopeless life?”
However your rhymes are on the same line which breaks the flow a little bit.
A super job!
Ruby
This is an amazing poem and you can tell you tried really hard and your describing is fantastic especially when it says ‘Would it ignite like a ruby red fire’
This is a really nice poem Alanis and Sophie i like that youv’e used some powerful words this is the line that i liked .does it flow like a feather or stumble in bad weather.
A very good poem
Kirin and Toby
Amazing imagery in this poem. I loved how you mentioned my name! And how the line “Can it survive in a hopeless life?”
However your rhymes are on the same line which breaks the flow a little bit.
A super job!
Ruby