This is great! You used great sentence openers and a strong selection of points but you didn’t counter your points and it would have been much better if you did.
That’s great! You really emphasized your points, but you put ‘ his disability ‘ and August doesn’t have a disability he has a syndrome, very good overall though, you could show a bit more emotion on the part where you say ‘ he will be isolated and alone’ like he will be isolated and alone for the rest of his life, do you really want August to go trough that pain and agony? It was a very strong argument.
This is great! You used great sentence openers and a strong selection of points but you didn’t counter your points and it would have been much better if you did.
That’s great! You really emphasized your points, but you put ‘ his disability ‘ and August doesn’t have a disability he has a syndrome, very good overall though, you could show a bit more emotion on the part where you say ‘ he will be isolated and alone’ like he will be isolated and alone for the rest of his life, do you really want August to go trough that pain and agony? It was a very strong argument.