I am not telling you to change it but your poem is more like a persuasive writing. Some parts are good since it gives me goose bumps. Try to get rid of the persuasive parts.
Fantastic! I really like your poem and you used some interesting adjectives like horrific. However remember to read over your work because there are a few missing commas and some phrases don’t make sense.
Wow! That was amazing. I loved the advice near the end and the description of how the character feels. The only thing I would say is that you could put a ‘…’ at the end of the first line
Chloie this is fantastic but you have not really got any feelings in the poem and you could be more persuasive ways to stop Cyber bullying. I have gave you a 9/ 10 well done.
Great poem, however its not really building up emotions its just telling us to stop bullying, its sound like personal experience
I am not telling you to change it but your poem is more like a persuasive writing. Some parts are good since it gives me goose bumps. Try to get rid of the persuasive parts.
Fantastic! I really like your poem and you used some interesting adjectives like horrific. However remember to read over your work because there are a few missing commas and some phrases don’t make sense.
Wow! That was amazing. I loved the advice near the end and the description of how the character feels. The only thing I would say is that you could put a ‘…’ at the end of the first line
Thank you for really good feedback Ronnie and Sumayyah
Thank you Ella I always love reading your feedback
Chloie this is fantastic but you have not really got any feelings in the poem and you could be more persuasive ways to stop Cyber bullying. I have gave you a 9/ 10 well done.
Instead of my heart hurts you could write a stab at my heart the pain unbearable but you did really well
I don’t think “what will happen if im all over the internet” makes sense with the bits before
great poem in general .:)