Brilliant diary entry, I like your use of repetition to emphasise Leonards anger. Make sure you re read your work to check for mistakes, you have missed out some words in some of your sentences.
Wow, that’s the most powerful piece of writing I’ve read all day! You have really captured Leonard and how he feels.
You have missed out a few words in your sentences but apart from that there is literally nothing wrong with it.
Brilliant diary entry, I like your use of repetition to emphasise Leonards anger. Make sure you re read your work to check for mistakes, you have missed out some words in some of your sentences.
Wow, that’s the most powerful piece of writing I’ve read all day! You have really captured Leonard and how he feels.
You have missed out a few words in your sentences but apart from that there is literally nothing wrong with it.