Great job Martin, I really like the way you describe the setting and how you move for example “my feet stopped in front of me, hearing screams in the distance.”I think you should improve how you do similes o metaphors.For example, the tree was as dark as a haunted house.Otis
A great piece of text I liked how you used the word “illuminated and depth
You could add a little bit more than that 🙁 try to put a lot of show not tell and some similes and metaphors. make sure you don’t write to much though
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Great job Martin, I really like the way you describe the setting and how you move for example “my feet stopped in front of me, hearing screams in the distance.”I think you should improve how you do similes o metaphors.For example, the tree was as dark as a haunted house.Otis
I like the poem