Well done. Amazing use of ellipses. You have used a great simile. Try not to put comers in the front of sentences. I think you could put some more description.
Well done Sameer you used a simile that made me feel how the person feels. You can use different openings instead of using I,it and my . You could use adverbial openings such as: slowly, finally.This will make your writing more exciting.
,I looked back it was gone, doesn’t make sense when you say ,there it was coming closer, there is a great use of ellipses and a good simile, try creating more suspense. You used , there, three times try using more powerful words to start the sentence.
There are commas in the beginning of the sentence,
Needs more suspense .
There are commas in the beginning of the sentence. Great use of ellipsis.
Well done. Amazing use of ellipses. You have used a great simile. Try not to put comers in the front of sentences. I think you could put some more description.
Well done Sameer you used a simile that made me feel how the person feels. You can use different openings instead of using I,it and my . You could use adverbial openings such as: slowly, finally.This will make your writing more exciting.
,I looked back it was gone, doesn’t make sense when you say ,there it was coming closer, there is a great use of ellipses and a good simile, try creating more suspense. You used , there, three times try using more powerful words to start the sentence.