Well done Rowaida i love the description and the word “peripheral”.All you can try to do is maybe try and make your poem longer but other than that its great.
The first line built suspense because you want to know why your heart is thumping. Try and use a ellipses so it will leave the reader guessing.
I like the way you used short sentences. Just to improve, you could add some commas And nice ways of bigger words! It just blew me away Rowaida!!
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Well done Rowaida i love the description and the word “peripheral”.All you can try to do is maybe try and make your poem longer but other than that its great.
The first line built suspense because you want to know why your heart is thumping. Try and use a ellipses so it will leave the reader guessing.
I like the way you used short sentences.
Just to improve, you could add some commas
And nice ways of bigger words!
It just blew me away Rowaida!!