It’s great that your using line breaks in the right places, although the 3rd paragraph leads to your poem not having suspense.
I love the good use of suspense and amazing vocabulary, I didn’t see many similes so maybe you can add a few more like “The deeps of the flames ridiculed my trepidation.” Great use of the grandfather clock chiming.
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It’s great that your using line breaks in the right places,
although the 3rd paragraph leads to your poem not having suspense.
I love the good use of suspense and amazing vocabulary, I didn’t see many similes so maybe you can add a few more like “The deeps of the flames ridiculed my trepidation.” Great use of the grandfather clock chiming.