I like your use of suspense in the beginning it had a lot of power. The line “I woke up, In some one house” doesn’t make sense so maybe replace it with “I woke up, In an unfamiliar surrounding” It will add a bit of power. Great vocabulary though.
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I like your use of suspense in the beginning it had a lot of power. The line “I woke up, In some one house” doesn’t make sense so maybe replace it with “I woke up, In an unfamiliar surrounding” It will add a bit of power. Great vocabulary though.