Great poem Teddy,
although there are some corrections to be done.
Such as ‘A BANG!’ could be just BANG! and maybe on a new line.
‘TICK TOCK TICK TOCK’ could be on a new line too.
While reading this i was on the edge of my seat, this is a great quick, short and snappy paragraph. It really does make the reader really think about what is happening, Well done Teddy! you are really improving overtime. :] !!
Great poem Teddy,
although there are some corrections to be done.
Such as ‘A BANG!’ could be just BANG! and maybe on a new line.
‘TICK TOCK TICK TOCK’ could be on a new line too.
Vincent and Sumayyah
Good work Teddy.
While reading this i was on the edge of my seat, this is a great quick, short and snappy paragraph. It really does make the reader really think about what is happening, Well done Teddy! you are really improving overtime. :] !!