A fantastic opening metaphor with some strong descriptive language. Try not to miss any capital I’s. What adverb could you have added to your final sentence?
I like the you used an adverb at the beginning of your sentence. What flung open? No capital letter at the beginning of your sentence. Please reread your work before posting! Never ever use more than 1 ellipses!!
A fantastic opening metaphor with some strong descriptive language. Try not to miss any capital I’s. What adverb could you have added to your final sentence?
An amazing start-off. just remember too many ellipses loses the suspense.
Impressive work. Good use of suspense and ellipsis!
Your short sentences made excellent impact I love it. You are a excellent poet.
I like the you used an adverb at the beginning of your sentence. What flung open? No capital letter at the beginning of your sentence. Please reread your work before posting! Never ever use more than 1 ellipses!!