I love this. It sound like maze runner. “Many questions swarmed my mind.” Swarmed is a great word and I love how you used the line X marks the spot. as a way of making the reader question what that means.
I love this. Also I like the way you described yourself, “My lips parted, a tight noise escaped my throat. I was in the centre of a maze. My legs felt numb, blood sprained my arms.” Its amazing well done Iris
This is really really really amazing! You have used really good description “my lips parted” “a tight noise escaped my throat” “blood sprained my arms” well done iris xx
I love this. It sound like maze runner. “Many questions swarmed my mind.” Swarmed is a great word and I love how you used the line X marks the spot. as a way of making the reader question what that means.
ooh thank you!
I love this. Also I like the way you described yourself, “My lips parted, a tight noise escaped my throat. I was in the centre of a maze. My legs felt numb, blood sprained my arms.” Its amazing well done Iris
Excellent I want to read more and the maze is in your mind no spelling mistakes well done.
AMAZING!!!! Your piece of writing is so detailed ‘Many questions swarmed my mind’ Love it Iris
EllieMay
This is really really really amazing! You have used really good description “my lips parted” “a tight noise escaped my throat” “blood sprained my arms” well done iris xx
Excellent!!! This piece is so detailed. Great atmosphere. I have so many questions. WOW!!!
wow its like I’m watching a movie:) 🙂
Wow, that’s an amazing piece of writing. I love the show not tell. The line “my lips parted” is just amazing.
I felt as if you were the writer of a award wining book