This is great! You’ve ended your writing with a cliff hanger. We like her attitude, to finish what he started. But, you have forgotten a few capital letters. Other than that, it was good! Iris and Saskia 🙂
You have an exquisite vocabulary and everything flows together. I also enjoy the sentence as the star’s dance upon the black sky. Now it’s time to moan about your work starting with this sentence .her thoughts are only to finish what her dad started . Can you spot the error? And also you’re only typing about the way she looks like. But if you overlook your short mistakes, You’ll find an excellent piece of writing and you’ll be wanting for more. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
I want to read more of this is sooooo good 🙂
I want to read more of this is sooooo good. 🙂
Tacy I really like the first paragraph and I like how you described your hero.
This hero thinks of overs. (doesn’t make sense)
This is great! You’ve ended your writing with a cliff hanger. We like her attitude, to finish what he started. But, you have forgotten a few capital letters. Other than that, it was good! Iris and Saskia 🙂
You have an exquisite vocabulary and everything flows together. I also enjoy the sentence as the star’s dance upon the black sky. Now it’s time to moan about your work starting with this sentence .her thoughts are only to finish what her dad started . Can you spot the error? And also you’re only typing about the way she looks like. But if you overlook your short mistakes, You’ll find an excellent piece of writing and you’ll be wanting for more. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂