Great start to your story Jasmine. Alex seems to me like an impulsive kind of person (someone who sometimes acts without thinking). It would be good to read more about Alex’s journey. I wonder where the map came from. How would you rewrite the sentence ‘It was a map and…’ So it flows more clearly, without so many ‘ands’.
Great start to your story Jasmine. Alex seems to me like an impulsive kind of person (someone who sometimes acts without thinking). It would be good to read more about Alex’s journey. I wonder where the map came from. How would you rewrite the sentence ‘It was a map and…’ So it flows more clearly, without so many ‘ands’.