Well done Zak! I can see you have worked hard on your story, especially proof reading. I like the simile and adjectives as they help me imagine the setting. I wish you could add the next part of your story. What happened? How did it all change? I really want to read more.
Well done Zak! I can see you have worked hard on your story, especially proof reading. I like the simile and adjectives as they help me imagine the setting. I wish you could add the next part of your story. What happened? How did it all change? I really want to read more.