Great start Charnáe! I like your choice of word ‘pathetically’. It shows your character’s point of view so well. I already feel sorry for your character (looking like a big burnt cookie!). What happened next? Did they land safely in Spain?
Awesome story Charnae. I loved how you created that exciting atmosphere at the end. I also really liked the description about the character e.g burnt cookie. Maybe you could included a few more adjectives. Which character do you think you relate to the most? Once again loved your blog,
Great start Charnáe! I like your choice of word ‘pathetically’. It shows your character’s point of view so well. I already feel sorry for your character (looking like a big burnt cookie!). What happened next? Did they land safely in Spain?
They actually landed in the French Alps and then the adventure began.
Awesome story Charnae. I loved how you created that exciting atmosphere at the end. I also really liked the description about the character e.g burnt cookie. Maybe you could included a few more adjectives. Which character do you think you relate to the most? Once again loved your blog,
Ruby
I could probably relate to Aliyah the most because I am always excited when I go on holiday and cant wait.
well done charnae what a good story you left me on a clif hanger
whats going to happen next?
you could improve by changing the font
Thanks for the advice Layla. In the end it crashes.