Brilliant story Lise! I love the way you make me picture everything in my head. It’s extremely emotional and is exactly how an evacuee would probably feel. Try and stick to one subject before moving one to the next one so it flows more. Would you feel like that if that was you? Once again amazing story,
By Ruby, Columba
I really enjoyed your story Lise. I like the way it moves along well with the text. It feels as if a real evacuee wrote it from his point of view .however its not all good. Every single sentence starts I (apart from the last sentence). Your Stories are always are a joy to read. Very well done Lise. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
Brilliant story Lise! I love the way you make me picture everything in my head. It’s extremely emotional and is exactly how an evacuee would probably feel. Try and stick to one subject before moving one to the next one so it flows more. Would you feel like that if that was you? Once again amazing story,
By Ruby, Columba
I really enjoyed your story Lise. I like the way it moves along well with the text. It feels as if a real evacuee wrote it from his point of view .however its not all good. Every single sentence starts I (apart from the last sentence). Your Stories are always are a joy to read. Very well done Lise. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂