When I was reading this I felt as if I was there watching the situation happen, I liked the part where you wrote ‘Only to be blocked by a crowd of children.’ However, to many ‘I’s
Amazing description but too many ‘I’s Love when you write .”Muuuuummmm!!!” I screamed as our steam train pulled away from the station. Giving you a way of knowing how sad he is.
Very emotional, and we liked the idea of kindly boy there to help, but there’s loads and loads of ‘I’s’.
When I was reading this I felt as if I was there watching the situation happen, I liked the part where you wrote ‘Only to be blocked by a crowd of children.’ However, to many ‘I’s
Amazing description but too many ‘I’s Love when you write .”Muuuuummmm!!!” I screamed as our steam train pulled away from the station. Giving you a way of knowing how sad he is.