I love in the introduction paragraph how you explain what is wrong.
Try and add some more commas in different places.
I love the RIP WOLF bit in the last paragraph.
This is great! I really like the story plot. Though it would be great if you could check over the grammar- it doesn’t all make sense. I also thought the fairy tale references were fantastic.
great piece of descriptive writing with the adjectives, and I like how the witch puts out the stone people to scare others away, to tell them.”this will be you”.
Maybe try and look over your grammar, but over all a very nice piece of writing.
Good job harry.
Very nice literature
Try not to start with nouns
Just Quality!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love in the introduction paragraph how you explain what is wrong.
Try and add some more commas in different places.
I love the RIP WOLF bit in the last paragraph.
I love how you said about how there are fairy tails and its very good.
Very good language and writing it makes it good because your doing commas and inverted commas and descriptive writing and good adjectives i like
Nice
Story is really good
How is jack stone?
I need to know pls
This is great! I really like the story plot. Though it would be great if you could check over the grammar- it doesn’t all make sense. I also thought the fairy tale references were fantastic.
great piece of descriptive writing with the adjectives, and I like how the witch puts out the stone people to scare others away, to tell them.”this will be you”.
Maybe try and look over your grammar, but over all a very nice piece of writing.
Good job harry.