“Well, I’m just stretching my cabs out the window. It’s really delightful, so do you care to join me?” I fibbed.” that is really similar to what you said earlier, “Err, Guy, I was just stretching my calves out the window.” I lied.”
This is more of a story and not much of it makes sense for example: like lying like a fabricator. This doesn’t make sense and i’m not sure what it could mean.
“Err, Guy, I was just stretching my calves out the window.”
You say that earlier and you say it again. And being already told later in the story what Ihab is doing, Guy has to be told … after being told.
‘When lying like a fabricator, I was trying to find food that is made by steam.’ doesn’t t make sense.
Also its a lot like a story
I did not get your story, it was hard to tell which was which. I could kind of see what the moods were, but the second story was just a less shouting version of the first. But I liked how you had a clear idea of your story
“there was tense building up” doesnt make sense, you mean there was tension.
“Well, I’m just stretching my cabs out the window. It’s really delightful, so do you care to join me?” I fibbed.” that is really similar to what you said earlier, “Err, Guy, I was just stretching my calves out the window.” I lied.”
I don’t get why you use guy as a name you have all the names in the world but you use guy.
Guy is a real name.
This is more of a story and not much of it makes sense for example: like lying like a fabricator. This doesn’t make sense and i’m not sure what it could mean.
“Err, Guy, I was just stretching my calves out the window.”
You say that earlier and you say it again. And being already told later in the story what Ihab is doing, Guy has to be told … after being told.
‘When lying like a fabricator, I was trying to find food that is made by steam.’ doesn’t t make sense.
Also its a lot like a story
I did not get your story, it was hard to tell which was which. I could kind of see what the moods were, but the second story was just a less shouting version of the first. But I liked how you had a clear idea of your story
The second was a calm version.
It was unlike anything I have ever read ( in a good way !)
you obviously had some incredible inspiration!!
But some of it was hard to follow.