I like the way how it realy makes me feel like i am actully there
Maybe next time you could use different words that mean the same thing like “ice & calm”.
You have some realy good describing words, & its good poem.
well done i loved your poem .I like the fact that you added some rhyming in there . I think you could in- prove on trying not to use the same words all the time. But I did like the flow of your poem.
wow thats great. next time try to maybe rhyme but other than that it was good.
I like the way how it realy makes me feel like i am actully there
Maybe next time you could use different words that mean the same thing like “ice & calm”.
You have some realy good describing words, & its good poem.
well done i loved your poem .I like the fact that you added some rhyming in there . I think you could in- prove on trying not to use the same words all the time. But I did like the flow of your poem.
from carlee