I like your paragraph but maybe you can make some spaces a little smaller and when you said you will be getting alot of presents it a little bit sounds like your a little too greedy but other than that its great 🙂
If the last thing you want is a pet then why do you want to buy it?
And your uncle isn’t a thing. next time re check as it does not make sense .
If it did it would be good.
I think you story is really good but should have of said ‘my uncle isn’t the best PERSON in the world’ instead of ‘my uncle isn’t the best THING in the world’.
Its a good story but what do you mean white t shirt and a swimming pig.
To Eylul,
I like your paragraph but maybe you can make some spaces a little smaller and when you said you will be getting alot of presents it a little bit sounds like your a little too greedy but other than that its great 🙂
From Rusudan
If the last thing you want is a pet then why do you want to buy it?
And your uncle isn’t a thing. next time re check as it does not make sense .
If it did it would be good.
I think you story is really good but should have of said ‘my uncle isn’t the best PERSON in the world’ instead of ‘my uncle isn’t the best THING in the world’.
I liked your story but i’m confused because you had a closed bracket at the very end but where does it start?
good job