great story Zuhayba one sentence mistake I think you need to change ”we look out for each other and we play together. Can you please change it to we played together apart from that good work
that was amazing, i love the way you are talking about you and your family, but i thought that the sentence “we were watching cartoon together” did’nt really make sense, apart from that it was brilliant
great story Zuhayba one sentence mistake I think you need to change ”we look out for each other and we play together. Can you please change it to we played together apart from that good work
that was amazing, i love the way you are talking about you and your family, but i thought that the sentence “we were watching cartoon together” did’nt really make sense, apart from that it was brilliant
I really like the way your story is done but there is some parts don,t make sence Iliked the part when you and your brother were having fun.
This is very good but you need to improve what you are writing like you said “we got oreos” but it should be we had oreos but it was all very good
I like it when you ate oreos whith tea it is very delicious.
this is AMAZING ZUHAYBA!