Wow Archie. This is amazing!!! I loved the line
“A stone sword that can never be held.” That bit is great! However you put ‘acurse’ instead of a ‘a curse’ and I think it should be ‘A curse that will never be broken’ instead of ‘A curse that will never be unbroken’ as it doesn’t make sense.
Ruby
Well done Archie I really liked how you switched your teacher with a ballerina
but you got something wrong (a curse)
but apart from that it was brilliant
Wow Archie. This is amazing!!! I loved the line
“A stone sword that can never be held.” That bit is great! However you put ‘acurse’ instead of a ‘a curse’ and I think it should be ‘A curse that will never be broken’ instead of ‘A curse that will never be unbroken’ as it doesn’t make sense.
Ruby
Well done Archie I really liked how you switched your teacher with a ballerina
but you got something wrong (a curse)
but apart from that it was brilliant