Great Mae. I love your abstract lines like
“Whispers from the clouds above.” However your poem is a bit jumpy and doesn’t flow. Also you wrote
“The first flake of that touches the earth” instead of “The first flake of snow that touched the earth.”
Apart from that it is brilliant! Ruby
Great Mae. I love your abstract lines like
“Whispers from the clouds above.” However your poem is a bit jumpy and doesn’t flow. Also you wrote
“The first flake of that touches the earth” instead of “The first flake of snow that touched the earth.”
Apart from that it is brilliant! Ruby