love the “threat” bit brilliant poem
I really liked the way you put a bunch of powerful adjectives in a row I think it’s a good touch but maybe you could up level the first line.
Wow! That’s an amazing poem, I particularly like this line (Unwanted thoughts flood my mind). However on the line (It happens!), you don’t really explain what happens in great depth. But the ellipsis is a good effect at the end.
By Vincent
Great poem Jess, it was full of suspense but try to add in more information about the fact that it is CYBERbulling.
I loved the part when it said gloom, darkness, threat but you could put ‘technology has left me’ in a new line
Wow! Your poem is amazing but I think you should get rid of the sentence “who am I what have I done” and then your poem will be outstanding!
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love the “threat” bit
brilliant poem
I really liked the way you put a bunch of powerful adjectives in a row I think it’s a good touch but maybe you could up level the first line.
Wow! That’s an amazing poem, I particularly like this line (Unwanted thoughts flood my mind).
However on the line (It happens!), you don’t really explain what happens in great depth.
But the ellipsis is a good effect at the end.
By Vincent
Great poem Jess, it was full of suspense but try to add in more information about the fact that it is CYBERbulling.
I loved the part when it said gloom, darkness, threat but you could put ‘technology has left me’ in a new line
Wow! Your poem is amazing but I think you should get rid of the sentence “who am I what have I done” and then your poem will be outstanding!