Well done Leila and jasmine you did really great.But there is one problem witch is the font of your writing is to small.But other wise you did really well with your punctuation.
wow! I would love to experience it myself. I like the way you spoke through and me knowing every little detail. Although, you missed out a capital letter at the begging of your sentence. Apart from that its perfect! 🙂
This is a super piece of writing!
I love how you included realistic description and adjectives.
However, you could of checked your punctuation (capital letters and full stops.)
This writing is really good though!
By Eva
Well done girls,
It’s really good but some of it doesn’t make sense. However I like the part when you said you entered the pitch It was a really good story. Well done guys
well done Leila and Jasmine I really liked your piece of writing about going to a Man United match. However I think you should check your punctuation, apart from that i really like your work well done
well done Leila and Jasmine you have created a marvellous piece of writing, although it looks like you have rushed it and you need to slow down a little
You could include more detial, but I like the way you got exited when you met th best keeper in the bpl de gea
By wasseem
Well done Leila and jasmine you did really great.But there is one problem witch is the font of your writing is to small.But other wise you did really well with your punctuation.
By Freddie
wow! I would love to experience it myself. I like the way you spoke through and me knowing every little detail. Although, you missed out a capital letter at the begging of your sentence. Apart from that its perfect! 🙂
By Alanis
This is a super piece of writing!
I love how you included realistic description and adjectives.
However, you could of checked your punctuation (capital letters and full stops.)
This writing is really good though!
By Eva
Well done girls,
It’s really good but some of it doesn’t make sense. However I like the part when you said you entered the pitch It was a really good story. Well done guys
well done Leila and Jasmine I really liked your piece of writing about going to a Man United match. However I think you should check your punctuation, apart from that i really like your work well done
By Leah
That was a very good story my favorote bit was when you said i gust want to skreem
orion class
I really like your 100 word challenge. By Leo B
well done Leila and Jasmine you have created a marvellous piece of writing, although it looks like you have rushed it and you need to slow down a little
I like it very much but you mist a few words but I like it, when there was a full stop you didn’t put a capital letter
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