Well done you have clearly shown why Leonard does not like Alex. You need to re read your work to make sure that you are not repeating yourself, you have repeated this sentence :’ I will make the blood from my lips for evidence against him’. Could you have described how Leonard felt after he had been punched in the face?
ok sir, I will not repeat myself and I will do that in my big write next time and I will describe that In my big write Alex feels happy that he punched him but Leonard felt sad and happy.
Excellent work Amel but maybe try check your spellings and add some more commers and full stop, as the story goes on it goes a bit boring so it loses it’s wow factor.
Well done you have clearly shown why Leonard does not like Alex. You need to re read your work to make sure that you are not repeating yourself, you have repeated this sentence :’ I will make the blood from my lips for evidence against him’. Could you have described how Leonard felt after he had been punched in the face?
ok sir, I will not repeat myself and I will do that in my big write next time and I will describe that In my big write Alex feels happy that he punched him but Leonard felt sad and happy.
Nice Diary of Leonard, try varying your sentences starters
Excellent work Amel but maybe try check your spellings and add some more commers and full stop, as the story goes on it goes a bit boring so it loses it’s wow factor.
-Dea
Great Work Amal. I love how you wrote ‘ Splitting are family into pieces’
Just remember to check back for spelling mistakes