Great poem,
It keeps a good rhythm,
Good simile: ‘Like angel light’,
However only use three dots in an ellipsis,
Also lines like:
‘I hid round a corner’
‘I ran and ran’
are the end of the sentence so you should put them like:
I ran and ran.
Great blog Salsabil. I love how you used the simile “like angles light”. With ellipsis you only need three dots and at the end you wrote “bye instead of “by”.
Great blog Salsabil. I love how you used the simile “like angles light”. With ellipsis you only need three dots and at the end you wrote “bye instead of “by”. But other then that it was a really good poem.
Ruby
You wrote there was together and that doesn’t make any sense it is very imaginative.
Great poem,
It keeps a good rhythm,
Good simile: ‘Like angel light’,
However only use three dots in an ellipsis,
Also lines like:
‘I hid round a corner’
‘I ran and ran’
are the end of the sentence so you should put them like:
I ran and ran.
ect.
Finally ‘Therewas’ is two separate words.
Finn and Ronnie
Salsabil you used to many dots for the elipsis you are only ment to do … and you said bye at the end as an error
Great blog Salsabil. I love how you used the simile “like angles light”. With ellipsis you only need three dots and at the end you wrote “bye instead of “by”.
Great blog Salsabil. I love how you used the simile “like angles light”. With ellipsis you only need three dots and at the end you wrote “bye instead of “by”. But other then that it was a really good poem.
Ruby
This is a great poem,
you used a fabulous similie!
But you forgot to put a space between ‘there’ and ‘was’
you also mis-spelt the word ‘by’