Great job Genta I really liked the ending bit could this be my final goodbye because it grabs the readers attention .
At the end you need a question mark because your asking a question.
By Brian
Great piece of writing! I loved how you started your blog with BANG making the reader wanting to read on to see where the noise came from.All your great similes really made me feel what the character was feeling. Next time try and add more detail to what is going on. This is a great blog.
Ruby
Great job Genta I really liked the ending bit could this be my final goodbye because it grabs the readers attention .
At the end you need a question mark because your asking a question.
By Brian
Great piece of writing! I loved how you started your blog with BANG making the reader wanting to read on to see where the noise came from.All your great similes really made me feel what the character was feeling. Next time try and add more detail to what is going on. This is a great blog.
Ruby
Well done. Great description. I think you could of used ellipsis at the end. I loved the way you described alone as isolated