The flash of red light sumayyah

4 Responses to The flash of red light sumayyah

1. ghosj says:

   November 25, 2015 at 3:05 pm

   That was a funny and scary story but you missed out a space but besides that it was great.
2. Cheekymonkey10 says:

   November 25, 2015 at 3:06 pm

   I think you should add commas not just full stops. I think you put so much effort into this it was outstanding.
3. bolad says:

   November 25, 2015 at 3:13 pm

   Your poem is really intense and really interesting but in some parts you could add some commas.
4. Ella says:

   January 13, 2016 at 11:05 am

   This is an amazing suspence poem. It is quick, snappy and sends a chill down my spine. This is my faverate type of poem.
   Although I think that the BANG should be on a seperate line.

   Ella

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