Great Jake! It was very funny when you went from waking up to going home at the right time to lift up your shirt and say X marks the spot! One thing I am not so sure about is when you rushed into speech between the soldier and his wife. Otherwise Great Story!!! 🙂
Great Jake! It was very funny when you went from waking up to going home at the right time to lift up your shirt and say X marks the spot! One thing I am not so sure about is when you rushed into speech between the soldier and his wife. Otherwise Great Story!!! 🙂
Jake! Where is your full stops :/ Its a nice piece of writing though Well done Jake
from OliviaT
I really liked the ending. But you missed afew full stops and commas. Other than that, It was a great piece of writing!
Yer 😀
I like the way that you didn’t say where you were, but instead described your surroundings. Great imagery!!!!
I like your story is very good and very funny and well done jake from
great use of the word ‘yer’
You havnt got any full stops and you didn’t say who was saying what. But good story 🙂
xX Sam + Ellie Xx
Where is your full stops and for a minute I didn’t know who said what but other than that it was good! 🙂
Nice story jake especially yer 🙂
Great story Jake
I really like the ending its really good did I mention it was funny well it was funny