I like the plot however it doesn’t make sense and I think the only way you can fix that problem is by reading your work over and check it! Some spelling mistakes but other than that it’s good.
I don’t if pirates would make my holiday better but if they would for you then they would.
Next time read it back to yourself or if not ask Latoya or Miss. Khan . The idea was good but it could be better but other than that it was good. 🙂
I liked the fact it was a happy story. But, it doesn’t really make much sense, also you used the word surprised too many times.
Well Done me.
I like the plot however it doesn’t make sense and I think the only way you can fix that problem is by reading your work over and check it! Some spelling mistakes but other than that it’s good.
This is alright but most of it don’t make any sense.
I don’t if pirates would make my holiday better but if they would for you then they would.
Next time read it back to yourself or if not ask Latoya or Miss. Khan . The idea was good but it could be better but other than that it was good. 🙂