well done bella this is really good I liked the bit when you said HEAD CHOPPED OFF I think that you should have done a diferent colour because you cant see what your wrote
Hi Bella,
Your blog is amazing! I loved how you talk about how the girl was following the rabbit around and messing up his reputation. Just one thing you said he was going to get executed but after 6 months he still was in the dungeon. Do you like Alice in Wonderland? Maybe if you write more you talk about how the rabbit spends his life and maybe he could try and have his revenge.
From Ruby
Well done!!!! this is a great blog. I like it when you said HEAD CHOPPED OFF!!!!!!! and you used your punctuation properly. Try not to put capital letters in the middle of your sentences but a part from that its good. Would you like to become an author one day?
Great diary blog! It was really funny. I liked it partly because it was really funny and partly because of the rabbit in the story. Mostly try to improve the varied sentence starts.
Would you like to do more blogging?
I suggest the girl called Alice will come back to be the queen or she will keep on annoying the rabbit.
This is absolutely AMAZING!!! It has lots of adjectives and is hilarious , you must have spent a lot of time on it. Even though it is really good you could improve on some of the spelling. Also does the rabbit escape out of the dungeon and does Alice come back? My opinion is that the rabbit does escape. Well Done
hi its Lukas ,
I really like your descriptive language and it painted a image in my mind!
maybe you could avoid so many errs next time. great though 😉 🙂
I really liked your diary because it was really funny and hilarious what made the diary funny is that the rabbit was like please let me go then he found out that he is not free to go . But what you might need to improve on is when you start your sentences. Do you have any more funny blogging’s?
I like this peace of writing because you have used a lot of descriptive langue and used a lot of varied sentence starters.
I thing you could improve that at the start I didn’t really know what was going on.
Was this peace of writing was based on Alice in wonderland?
Hi Bella its Brian from Columba class . I could not really read the writing because of the font .
Would you like to be a writer when you are older because you are really good at writing.
By Brian
hi Bella its Amy I really loved the beautiful peace of writing you did but
it was really hard to read it so I think you should change the font.
How long did it take to do that peace of writing and I think the rabbit is going to go to do super well
well done bella
you can improve on the font because couldn’t read it properly
how would you feel if you if you were a rabbit
I liked the part when she yelled I’m about to get my head chopped of
the super rabbit can go to a super world
We really liked the punctuation because it made good sense. You could improve on the sentence starters. Could you describe the characters better? We think at the end you should make girl friends.
What I like about the writing is when you put punctuation and about the character . And you have a lovely story because it make sense. I like the post because when you said I here crying but. And it was good work and I like when the Rabbits was funny and lovely Rabbits . Amy I like the post because it have a good writing. What happens next Amy .Amy could you read back because your spelling.
From maddy
I really like your post because its about a rabbit. I think that your sentences are a little bit short and you should put more info and detail. Did you enjoy writing it ?.I think that there should be a bad rabbit and they have an argument
well done bella this is really good I liked the bit when you said HEAD CHOPPED OFF I think that you should have done a diferent colour because you cant see what your wrote
Hi Bella,
Your blog is amazing! I loved how you talk about how the girl was following the rabbit around and messing up his reputation. Just one thing you said he was going to get executed but after 6 months he still was in the dungeon. Do you like Alice in Wonderland? Maybe if you write more you talk about how the rabbit spends his life and maybe he could try and have his revenge.
From Ruby
Well done!!!! this is a great blog. I like it when you said HEAD CHOPPED OFF!!!!!!! and you used your punctuation properly. Try not to put capital letters in the middle of your sentences but a part from that its good. Would you like to become an author one day?
Oh no! I like your use of punctuation. Remember new days are new paragraph. How did you get the dates.
Great diary blog! It was really funny. I liked it partly because it was really funny and partly because of the rabbit in the story. Mostly try to improve the varied sentence starts.
Would you like to do more blogging?
I suggest the girl called Alice will come back to be the queen or she will keep on annoying the rabbit.
This is absolutely AMAZING!!! It has lots of adjectives and is hilarious , you must have spent a lot of time on it. Even though it is really good you could improve on some of the spelling. Also does the rabbit escape out of the dungeon and does Alice come back? My opinion is that the rabbit does escape. Well Done
Hello Bella great blog, I really like the idea of writing it like a diary
how would you feel if you was the queen? 😉
hi its Lukas ,
I really like your descriptive language and it painted a image in my mind!
maybe you could avoid so many errs next time. great though 😉 🙂
I really liked your diary because it was really funny and hilarious what made the diary funny is that the rabbit was like please let me go then he found out that he is not free to go . But what you might need to improve on is when you start your sentences. Do you have any more funny blogging’s?
well done Bella keep the good work up
I like this peace of writing because you have used a lot of descriptive langue and used a lot of varied sentence starters.
I thing you could improve that at the start I didn’t really know what was going on.
Was this peace of writing was based on Alice in wonderland?
O.M.G. WOW that is the best story I have ever read I LOVE the fact it if a diary… of a rabbit !!!
however you could change the font.
Great so funny. Next time check the spelling. Do you like Alice in wonderland? Maybe Alice could stay and become queen.
Maybe next time the rabbit could go LEGOLAND
Maybe next time the rabbit could go LEGOLAND
It ‘s very good its amasing from liban
Hi Bella its Brian from Columba class . I could not really read the writing because of the font .
Would you like to be a writer when you are older because you are really good at writing.
By Brian
hi bella I just want to say your writing is hard to see so can you change your font next time you do your blog thank you bye
REALLY GOOD, I LIKED THE BIT WHEN THE GIRL WAS FOLLOWING THE RABBIT.YOU HAVE A SPELLING MiSTAKe.
hi Bella its Amy I really loved the beautiful peace of writing you did but
it was really hard to read it so I think you should change the font.
How long did it take to do that peace of writing and I think the rabbit is going to go to do super well
well done bella
you can improve on the font because couldn’t read it properly
how would you feel if you if you were a rabbit
I liked the part when she yelled I’m about to get my head chopped of
the super rabbit can go to a super world
I like the bit is when the girl said ‘I’m in a prison and I’m about to get my head chopped off. In your writing I
can’t read it but it was awesome
I like your vocabulary and I like your ideas also were did you get your ideas. And don’t put so much captel leters.
REALLY GOOD, I LIKED THE BIT WHEN THE GIRL WAS FOLLOWING THE RABBIT.YOU HAVE A SPELLING MASTAKE YOU PUT GARD INSTED OF GARD’S
We really liked the punctuation because it made good sense. You could improve on the sentence starters. Could you describe the characters better? We think at the end you should make girl friends.
What I like about the writing is when you put punctuation and about the character . And you have a lovely story because it make sense. I like the post because when you said I here crying but. And it was good work and I like when the Rabbits was funny and lovely Rabbits . Amy I like the post because it have a good writing. What happens next Amy .Amy could you read back because your spelling.
From maddy
I liked it because it raeli made you want to read on. I liked the bit when the rabbit got chased by the little girl
from LIBAN
I really like your post because its about a rabbit. I think that your sentences are a little bit short and you should put more info and detail. Did you enjoy writing it ?.I think that there should be a bad rabbit and they have an argument
Nice work it really made me want to read on