Wow!! That was great except for a few mistakes like how you’ve said they and then changed to we. Also I got out of breath from reading too long sentences so use more full stops, don’t forget your punctuation! It’s very important! But other than that it was great. Well done!
You forget to put capital letter for Joseph and Jo Jo
Also for he you put hey
Also make sure you read over your work because you didn’t put a capital for even.
But anyway nice work I enjoyed the story well done plus I liked it were it was Vincent and Joseph
Wow!! That was great except for a few mistakes like how you’ve said they and then changed to we. Also I got out of breath from reading too long sentences so use more full stops, don’t forget your punctuation! It’s very important! But other than that it was great. Well done!
You forget to put capital letter for Joseph and Jo Jo
Also for he you put hey
Also make sure you read over your work because you didn’t put a capital for even.
But anyway nice work I enjoyed the story well done plus I liked it were it was Vincent and Joseph