Nice story Jake, it was really good but a couple spelling errors. I like the twist where nobody knows if he’s a hero or a villain!!! 😀
my best part of the story was when he was lurking around past your bed time
your hero’s appearance was amazing and the way you described the backstory
thanks Ollie
that was a brilliant story Jake and I really like your ending.
Jake you spelt sure wrong, you also used great words like lurking. you also used all of the things on the board. Well done.
I really like your first sentence I ALSO REALLY LIKE THE SENTENCE WERE U SE HIM TURN A CORNER THE A FEW MINUETS LATER U HEAR GUN SHOTS
Your hero’s appearance is cool and I like your backstory 😉
Good Work Jake good description of your heroes appearance but I think what you are missing is a moral otherwise this is a great piece of work! 🙂
Your hero’s appearance is cool and I like your backstory Well done
Your hero’s appearance is cool and I like your backstory Well done Jake
The ending is sad and the mother died so sad.
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Nice story Jake, it was really good but a couple spelling errors. I like the twist where nobody knows if he’s a hero or a villain!!! 😀
my best part of the story was when he was lurking around past your bed time
your hero’s appearance was amazing and the way you described the backstory
thanks Ollie
that was a brilliant story Jake and I really like your ending.
Jake you spelt sure wrong, you also used great words like lurking. you also used all of the things on the board. Well done.
I really like your first sentence I ALSO REALLY LIKE THE SENTENCE WERE U SE HIM TURN A CORNER THE A FEW MINUETS LATER U HEAR GUN SHOTS
Your hero’s appearance is cool and I like your backstory 😉
Good Work Jake good description of your heroes appearance but I think what you are missing is a moral otherwise this is a great piece of work! 🙂
Your hero’s appearance is cool and I like your backstory Well done
Your hero’s appearance is cool and I like your backstory Well done Jake
The ending is sad and the mother died so sad.