Its a nice peace but read your work back next time
It’s a nice introduction and you have explained the attitude and behaviour well. But I think you’ve featured around the train a lot.
Your work is amazing
I want more …………………
I want to read more. I want to know what else he does to save people other than that it was good. Well done
MORE………………… I love how you said the hero stopped a train then disappeared in the blink of an eye. It’s like the hero is hiding something. I would like to know the origin.
Hi Finn, Its Olly, Great Story!!!!B ut Next time read over your work and check for grammatical errors, Good Job!!!! 😉
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Its a nice peace but read your work back next time
It’s a nice introduction and you have explained the attitude and behaviour well. But I think you’ve featured around the train a lot.
Your work is amazing
I want more …………………
I want to read more. I want to know what else he does to save people other than that it was good. Well done
MORE…………………
I love how you said the hero stopped a train then disappeared in the blink of an eye.
It’s like the hero is hiding something.
I would like to know the origin.
Hi Finn, Its Olly, Great Story!!!!B ut Next time read over your work and check for grammatical errors, Good Job!!!! 😉