Well done! I like the way you made me picture the scene in my mind and I don’t think there is nothing you could improve on. Do you think you will be a writer when you grow up?
That was very good! I liked how the child makes a heart on the window towards the end. it was good that you included thoughts and feelings. I would feel very sad if I were he. maybe you could improve by describing the other children more.
i liked your use of vocabulary. 🙂
Well done! I like the way you made me picture the scene in my mind and I don’t think there is nothing you could improve on. Do you think you will be a writer when you grow up?
This Was Really good 🙂 I Liked the Similes you chose and the description
I really like the atmosphere BUT I think you could improve by talking about the children around him.
I almost can feel how the boy feels.
That is very good hamza because your rainbow writing and this the best work From Niyah
I really love the sentence you ended with ‘At this point, isolation had gotten the better of me.’ 🙂
Its got a lot of full stops.
Hamza it’s really good I like the part when he say’s ” she always would be in my heart.”
That was very good! I liked how the child makes a heart on the window towards the end. it was good that you included thoughts and feelings. I would feel very sad if I were he. maybe you could improve by describing the other children more.
i liked your use of vocabulary. 🙂