WW1,Remembrance day by Daniel.B EDITED

3 Responses to WW1,Remembrance day by Daniel.B EDITED

1. harus says:

   November 14, 2014 at 12:31 pm

   This sounds like a story. I like the you used joined up handwriting.
2. stepl says:

   November 14, 2014 at 12:33 pm

   This work was amazing I loved the way you used short powerful sentences, although you need to stop using so many ‘I’s.
   Lillian
3. mshuttleworth says:

   November 14, 2014 at 4:19 pm

   Could you use adverbial openers?

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