This posting is much better, easier to read and the words flow, attention paid to small details Only criticism is that it still starts talking about Tom then reverts to yourself.
Brilliant, imaginative piece of text. You have used real-live creatures aswell as your own imagination, but next time edit your work by adding some punchuation.
This posting is much better, easier to read and the words flow, attention paid to small details Only criticism is that it still starts talking about Tom then reverts to yourself.
Brilliant, imaginative piece of text. You have used real-live creatures aswell as your own imagination, but next time edit your work by adding some punchuation.