You are missing full stops and in some points it does not make sense but apart from that If I was a girl it would of been great and a fun day out!
It was good Helin but make sure you add full stops! (Important)
Good work but why is there blue writing.
Lovely Helin!!but make sure you put full stop’s when needed!!
Excellent work! you have used a good simile there. Don’t forget your full stops!!
Your story is good but, you missed out some full stops and comma’s.
That was a good work you did something wrong at the end you put in the best sleep over ever that doesn’t make sense really.
wow!!! Helin, that was brilliant, the only thing you need to improve on is your full stops. other than that it was really good!
Your work was brilliant but I think you need to improve more information about the turtle turning into a orange
I really like your blog a lot but maybe you could say when the tortoise turned into a orange ,you could write Then it rolled down the road.By Shannon.
Helin, you have done very well ,but I do not know if you where talking about a Turtle or a Tortoise? I also hope you had a WONDERFULL sleep over.
By T
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You are missing full stops and in some points it does not make sense but apart from that If I was a girl it would of been great and a fun day out!
It was good Helin but make sure you add full stops! (Important)
Good work but why is there blue writing.
Lovely Helin!!but make sure you put full stop’s when needed!!
Excellent work! you have used a good simile there. Don’t forget your full stops!!
Your story is good but, you missed out some full stops and comma’s.
That was a good work you did something wrong at the end you put in the best sleep over ever that doesn’t make sense really.
wow!!! Helin, that was brilliant, the only thing you need to improve on is your full stops.
other than that it was really good!
Your work was brilliant but I think you need to improve more information about the turtle turning into a orange
I really like your blog a lot but maybe you could say when the tortoise turned into a orange ,you could write Then it rolled down the road.By Shannon.
Helin,
you have done very well ,but I do not know if you where talking about a Turtle or a Tortoise?
I also hope you had a WONDERFULL sleep over.
By T