I liked how you sort of connected your story to anti-bullying week.Check your use of words.It was cool that you put your title at the end.
I really enjoyed reading it but if I was you I would give a different word instead of sad. Apart from that it is a great story because it was interesting to read! Molly
Amazing story!I liked because it as a happy ending.
It is very funny Honey and Ahmed. Be clear with your sentences. It is very sad but it has a lovely ending.
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I liked how you sort of connected your story to anti-bullying week.Check your use of words.It was cool that you put your title at the end.
I really enjoyed reading it but if I was you I would give a different word instead of sad. Apart from that it is a great story because it was interesting to read!
Molly
Amazing story!I liked because it as a happy ending.
It is very funny Honey and Ahmed.
Be clear with your sentences.
It is very sad but it has a lovely ending.