Well done Henry! Maybe you can check your punctuation and read over your work.
You did not use much speech in the first paragraph, but you used a lot for the second. I wonder why? Good story, though.
You have over used the word said but its good.
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Well done Henry! Maybe you can check your punctuation and read over your work.
You did not use much speech in the first paragraph, but you used a lot for the second. I wonder why? Good story, though.
You have over used the word said but its good.