A really dramatic story, but they closed in to what? That is a cliffhanger! This could be better, but why did you have to repeat the word came? That doesn’t make sense, overall, this is good.
What a dramatic story, amazing how you made it suspenseful all way through and that got me really scared when it said they rushed towards the window and also the part of the floor juddering of their stamping legs.
A really dramatic story, but they closed in to what? That is a cliffhanger! This could be better, but why did you have to repeat the word came? That doesn’t make sense, overall, this is good.
When i say “they came and came” it means they seemed to never stop coming, that totaly makes sense.
I get it now.
Good
Hahaha very funny and also pretty creepy alike Jack there were a few spelling mistakes but it was still really good
It was extremely funny and I love the way you mad it funny and still have suspense
thanks
Nice, but there were a few mistakes though, but it was generally great!
KILLER COWS!
Thanks:)
Btw all you peeps who said that i have a few mistakes are WRONG, i fixed them 🙂
Griff you have given me a chill in my spine because of the killer cow
Your next;)
To haywg
What a dramatic story, amazing how you made it suspenseful all way through and that got me really scared when it said they rushed towards the window and also the part of the floor juddering of their stamping legs.